Friday, April 11, 2008

Rocker's Collection of DS

Rocker was a boy. He had lots of DSs. He got them for his birthday. He also had lots of games. He had Pokemon, Mario, Kirby and Cars.

Rocker wanted to give Rocky, his friend, a gold DS for his birthday. But suddenly, the DS broke! It fell down from his bed and the side broke, so he can't give it to Rocky.

Rocker tried to fix the broken DS. He put it under his pillow and added more pillows on top of his own pillow. Then he sat on all of the pillows to fix the DS. He was trying to fix the DS by pushing it together. But it didn't work.

Then, he tried to fix it by bending. He lay down on the pillow with the DS under it. Then he said to his sister, "Put pillows on me and when I say get on, you get on the pillows. When I say get off, you get off the pillows." Then he said, "Get on!" His sister got on the pillows, and then he said, "Get off!" but his sister didn't hear him, so he shouted, "GET OFF!!!" and then his sister got off. But it didn't work.

Rocker sat on top of the pillows. He got an idea. He thought to himself, "It just might work. The DS might get fixed." So he went to the DS shop and said to the man, "Can you fix this?" The man said, "Yes." So the man fixed it and Rocker made it to the birthday party. He gave the DS to Rocky. And Rocky was so happy. Then the party stopped and Rocker got his goody bag and went home.

THE END.

3 comments:

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Unknown said...

Hey, Sean! Ms. Melvin emailed me the comment below. I thought I'd post it here so you could read it, too...

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Hi Sean! I LOVE your blog site. You're becoming quite an author-this story is one of your best yet! I enjoyed all the creative ideas the character (Rocker) came up with to try and repair the DS. I also thought it was super cool how you solved the problem by having the character think of taking the broken DS to the "fix-it" shop. You have a great imagination. Can't wait to hear your next story idea!

Ms. Melvin
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Unknown said...

Dear Sean,

My, my! You are becoming quite the imaginative author. Tell your mom to enroll you in Creative Writing classes so you can better develop this talent.

love,
Ninang Chiqui